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- 3-25-2000, Character Significance
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Started on Sat Mar 25 22:16:24 2000
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<Sea Witch> The new WV will be going online
maybe tomorrow (or is that today?) <g>
<Casey> Cool, SW! Congratulations!!
<Casey> Does Zen know yet?
<Sea Witch> I didn't know until an hour ago. Mr
SW has been working on it all day
<Wwombat> Just 'cos I'm down here
<Sea Witch> Yeah, ain't that typical of us
Norther Hemispherists?
<Wwombat> Big bullies. I'll tell Tarquar
<Sea Witch> Adds new meaning to the British
North/South divide
<Sea Witch> That's Tarquin!
<Wwombat> Is he North or South? The Americans
divided across the compass as well
<Sea Witch> If anyone tried to divide Tarq's
compass he'd grease them
<Sea Witch> Messily
<Sea Witch> With his patented Kill-O-Zap
<Wwombat> I'll go and hide again. I can't stand
mess !
<Sea Witch> MWAH HAH HAH HAH
<Wwombat> I was trying to invent a Zap-O-Kill
<Wwombat> He got in first
<Wwombat> Is this sanity approaching ?
<Sea Witch> Hey A newbie!
<Sea Witch> Hi Jessie
<crip> YES ONTO THE GRAMMAR LESSON!!!
<crip> oh guess not he he he
<Casey> Tonight's topic is character
significance. How to control which characters loom
large or small within your story.
<Casey> LOL, Crip, you rat.
<Sea Witch> Lost Jessie
<kissfan> Where did Jessie go?
<Casey> jessie?
<Goshwin> poof
<Casey> This does not bode well. :-(
<Wwombat> Casey, how can you hope to control
characters when you can't control us types ?
<kissfan> well we're off to a fine ICQ start
<Sea Witch> LOL marsupial
<Casey> I've already scared her. She writes
poetry.
<Casey> Characters are more cooperative.
<Wwombat> Poetic types are fragile ? There was
a young lady of .........
<Casey> Okay, at least Jessie's exit wasn't
involuntary. We shall continue. I don't know whether
she'll rejoin us or not.
<Wwombat> Waiting to be continued
<Casey> How is information about characters
revealed?
<Casey> In any story.
<Wwombat> By actions and dialogue.
<Casey> Yep.
<Casey> Given a choice between the two--actions
and dialogue--which is a reader more likely to
believe?
<crip> dialogue
<kissfan> dialogue
<kissfan> ?
<Casey> Nope. Usually actions. Characters, like
real people, can lie.
<Wwombat> Sometimes. He shot him has more
impact than "I think I'm going to shoot
you."
<crip> I must disagree, teach
<Casey> Why, Crip?
<Sea Witch> Dialogue tells you something about
the nature of the beast
<kissfan> Yes a character can do one thing and
say another just like we can
<crip> yeah what SW said
<Casey> It can tell you the character's a liar.
Afterwards, won't you pay more attention to his
plucking feathers from chickens instead of believing
him when he says he won't hurt a living creature?
<Sea Witch> The test of a character lies
somewhere between dialogue and action
<Goshwin> I'm on Case's side so there (NYAAAA)
<Sea Witch> Teacher's pet!
<Goshwin> (Purr Purr)
<Wwombat> so both action AND dialogue
contribute
<Sea Witch> I was thinking RAT
<Casey> The two DO work together (or at
opposites) and both are revealing.
<Goshwin> (Churrr Churrr)
<Casey> lol, SW
<Sea Witch> SW takes a bow
<Casey> How else is character revealed?
<Goshwin> (Kicks exposed ass)
<Wwombat> so minor characters should do minor
things ?
<Wwombat> The introductory description
<Sea Witch> OUCH!!!! SW rubs affected part
<Wwombat> Now we're back to her backside again
!!
<Sea Witch> Mannerisms
<Wwombat> She has mannerisms on her backside?
<Casey> True, Richard. The characters who
appear in the first chapter or the introductory scene
are usually believed to be significant in the story.
<Goshwin> it was an easy target (hard to miss
that BUTT)
<kissfan> LOL
<Casey> And a "but" is?
<Sea Witch> Then get your face out of it Gosh
<Casey> (All my grammar students are expected
to know that answer)
<crip> um....conjunction?
<Casey> Crip gets an A!
<crip> REALLY????? WOW I GUESSED
<Goshwin> Conjunction junction what's your
function
<Sea Witch> Good guess Crip!
<Wwombat> So the opening scene should contain
the a main character. If lonely, minor characters are
allowed, but they must play second fiddle.
<crip> *LOL* that's what I was thinking too
Gosh!!!
<Goshwin> he he he, those were cool tunes)
<Casey> Other ways of revealing info? (Yes,
there are more.)
<Wwombat> Initial description of a character
<kissfan> description
<Sea Witch> Hey I was about to say that!
<Wwombat> Should be brief for secondary types
<Casey> How can description be revealed without
simply telling by the author?
<Wwombat> Secondary characters are often
stereotypes ? Come back to this thought.
<Sea Witch> Another character of course
<Sea Witch> Or looking in a mirror
<kissfan> yep what she said
<Casey> Yes, SW.
<Wwombat> An initial narrative description is
accepted on the arrival of a new character in a
scene.
<Casey> By what other characters say about the
one character, what they see when they look at
him/her, how others react to the character.
<Casey> What they say about the character
(gossip)
<Sea Witch> Yeah, If he's wild eyed and
swinging an ax then it's a good guess he ain't too
friendly
<Casey> This technique can be especially useful
when dealing with absentee characters--influencing
reader opinion before the guy or gal ever shows up.
<Casey> Either for or against.
<Wwombat> Especially true of a powerful
authority figure who can impact the plot
<Casey> It's especially useful with powerful
characters, making them larger than life.
<Casey> We're thinking along the same lines,
Wwombat.
<Casey> More ways to convey significance upon a
character?
<Wwombat> Have the hero hide from him --
evasive action
<Wwombat> 'cos he's wielding that anx axe
<Casey> Yep. Especially good for evil
characters.
<Sea Witch> Chop your head off!
<crip> here Casey let us demonstrate on Aya.
just put his head in this vice.
<Wwombat> Chickens run about after their heads
are chopped off. I don't know about wombats. I never
tried
<Sea Witch> CRUNNNNNNNNNNNNCH
<Casey> I pushed him off a cliff just for you,
Crip!
<crip> yeah but that wasn't real.
<kissfan> OUCH (hope he bounces)
<Casey> I need him around a bit longer. Give
him a break.
<Sea Witch> Right back into the plot Kathy
<Wwombat> bump bump bomp
<kissfan> LOL
<Casey> How about frequency of appearance?
<Wwombat> Or collecting flowers for non-evil
ones
<Sea Witch> Does it count if he's caught in a
revolving door?
<Wwombat> Only in a circular story
<Casey> If a character keeps showing up all
over the place, the reader gets the idea he's
probably someone to keep an eye on.
<Casey> That gets repetitive, Witchie.
<Wwombat> The mail man done it
<Casey> Your "collecting flowers for
non-evil ones" starts getting into quirks, which
draw attention to characters, Richard.
<Wwombat> If the character keeps turning up,
then the story is using more words to describe
him/her
<Wwombat> So a more general rule could be the
amount of story time devoted to a character
<Casey> Yep.
<Casey> And that can be relative. 100 words of
a 1000 word story is 10%--a large amount. 100 words
in 120,000 word novel is almost overlooked.
<Wwombat> As to quirks, giving them to minor
characters makes them quickly more interesting
<Casey> Yes. And quirks, like many other
writing techniques, should not be overdone.
<Sea Witch> I'm with you on that last one
Wwombat. It's the quickest way I know to promote a
minor character
<crip> define quirks though and how much is too
much
<Casey> frequently picking your nose is a
quirk.
<kissfan> a twitching left eye?
<kissfan> when nervous that is
<Casey> Drumming fingers on a desk anytime you
have to wait is a quirk.
<Sea Witch> You don't want someone scratching
his nose more than a couple of times lest the reader
thinks the character has something horribly catching
<Wwombat> Protagonists have to be mostly sane
else the reader can't follow or anticipate their
actions or participate in their fears
<crip> ok
<Sea Witch> But most people do it
<kissfan> running fingers through hair
<Wwombat> Only for bald men
<Sea Witch> That's definitely a nervous or
self-conscious gesture
<kissfan> LOL
<Casey> You don't want every character you use
to have some odd quirk, otherwise it looks like a
cheap trick of the writer.
<Wwombat> Wearing clashing clothes: like a jock
strap with a trilby
<Casey> LOL! Thank you for that one, Richard.
he he he
<Wwombat> But I suppose it all depends on the
colour of the trilby
<kissfan> LOL
<Sea Witch> You sound very knowledgable about
things like that Wwombat.....
<Wwombat> I've studied hats
<Sea Witch> I've studied......the other thing
<Sea Witch> Falsies are something of a let down
don't you think?
<Wwombat> I thought they were supposed to be up
lifting
<Casey> Character appearances can also be
infrequent if every time they show up, something
major or significant happens.
<Sea Witch> I love the way Casey presses on.
Relentlessly. You gotta hand it to her. Teaching in
the face of absurdity
<Wwombat> How did you know my face was ....
<Sea Witch> Yeah, bad guys have a tendency to
cause choas and don't need to appear too often
<Goshwin> Plowing on through spit balls and cat
calls
<Casey> (That doesn't mean I'm not laughing.
But we could get seriously sidetracked and not learn
much.)
<Sea Witch> Meowwwww
<crip> no you don't SW
<crip> he he he
<Wwombat> So every time a witch appears, it
rains
<Casey> Here, every time a witch appears,
there's mayhem and murder.
<Sea Witch> Not in this continuum Oz-buddy
<Wwombat> I thought it was just coincidence
!!!!
<Casey> Also, passive characters will seem much
less important than active characters.
<Goshwin> And people start turning into toads
(humm, I have a case of the munchies, time for a nice
fat fly)
<Sea Witch> Rivettttt
<Wwombat> Sorry, not a rain witch. Do you have
visions, as a see witch?
<crip> even those that are drug induced?
<Sea Witch> Yeah, I look around to see which
marsupial is gonna get made into toast
<Casey> It depends upon what those characters
do in their drugged state.
<crip> ah
<Wwombat> Get fried, apparently. Excuse the
smell of roasting fur
<Sea Witch> Ewwwwww
<kissfan> yeck hate the smell of roasted fur
<Casey> If they lay around and watch the pretty
halos around the light bulb, that isn't too
interesting. If they go out and dismember fellow
characters then cook dinner, that's much more
interesting.
<Wwombat> So passive drugged characters are
minor ? i.e. below the age of consent
<kissfan> Ya then you wonder what is in the
stew
<Wwombat> Depends what they cook and witch hat
they wear
<Casey> Exactly.
<Casey> And whether the color clashes with
their g-string.
<Goshwin> I love the smell of burnt fur in the
morning... It smells... Like victory..
<Sea Witch> LOL Gosh
<Sea Witch> Tarq couldn't have put it better
<Casey> Finally, sympathy raises the stature of
a character.
<Wwombat> Oh, I didn't realize this was a
g-string class
<Sea Witch> Which is why people abuse their
characters
<Casey> (Reader sympathy for the character, not
character having sympathy for other characters)
<Wwombat> like a minor character trying to
rescue an animal in a fire. Quickly becomes the
centre of attention
<Sea Witch> Or getting chucked off a cliff
<Wwombat> Only a short time to get sympathetic
before ... bump
<Casey> But when that happens, readers then
expect that minor character to become significant in
the story--or something good to happen to him in the
end.
<crip> they do?
<Sea Witch> You meant SPLAT, Richard. People
are nothing but bags of funny coloured water
<Wwombat> Can't he be a diversion while the
baddy sets up the next catastophe ?
<Casey> Yes, he can be. But there is still some
expectation of resolution of that subplot.
<Sea Witch> Unless it's the beginning of a
murder mystery in which case.....tough cookies
<Wwombat> Won't the tough cookies get soggy in
those bags of water ?
<Sea Witch> Important to the plot but no longer
around except in conversation
<Sea Witch> Don't you dunk biccies down under?
<Wwombat> Casey has a good point. The reader
expects all threads of the story to be resolved.
<Goshwin> Blink Blink.... wow there was nothing
then I was floating and then this light... It was red
light and all these guys with pitchforks and..
<Sea Witch> Takes big wooden spoon and gives
pot a huge stir
<Wwombat> Getting modest SW?
<Sea Witch> Mmmmmppphhhh
<Wwombat> Can we mess up again now?
<Sea Witch> Er.....can I talk now?
<Casey> Back to shennanigans and such again.
<Casey> yes, SW
<Sea Witch> Never been there. What's it like at
this time of year
<Casey> Okay, we've covered all the ways I know
about for making characters important.
<kissfan> Oh pooh and I was just getting
started
<Wwombat> Casey, to summarise, if a character
is too quirky and takes up too much story time, they
can't be minor. Like Witchy
<Casey> Now, how do we control minor
characters, so they don't create subplots we don't
want to mess with?
<Casey> Exactly, Wwombat.
<Wwombat> Forget them altogether. Lock them out
<Goshwin> Brain implants?
<Casey> Witchie is definitely one of our larger
than life characters.
<Sea Witch> Kill 'em. Kill 'em all. Mwah hah
hah hah
<Casey> You DO need minor characters in most
stories.
<Casey> (Live minor characters)
<crip> I'm with SW on this one
<Wwombat> Just so Witchie can kill them ?
<Casey> They're like the crowd in the
department store. If they weren't there, we're either
talking after closing hours, or unrealistic.
<kissfan> ya the main characters need someone
to interact with
<Sea Witch> Well I gotta do something to earn
my serene outlook on life.
<Casey> witchie kills an awful lot of
characters.
<Casey> Be glad she's not writing about you.
<Sea Witch> Someone p*sses me off in real life
I do them in. Literary style
<Casey> Exactly, Kathy. And people to talk
about the main character and make him/her more
important than s/he would be otherwise.
<kissfan> exactly
<Goshwin> (eyes SW with suspicion)
<Sea Witch> Minor characters, when written
properly, can add richness to a plot.
<Wwombat> So minor characters are utilitarian
<Casey> Okay, on to minor characters. What
makes them minor?
<Wwombat> Age ?
<Wwombat> Size ?
<kissfan> smaller parts in the story?
<Casey> 10 year olds can be protagonists.
<Wwombat> The story is not about them
<Casey> Yes, Kathy.
<crip> yeah but we can't kill them
<Casey> There's no one Witchie can't kill.
<Sea Witch> BIG GRIN
<crip> true
<Wwombat> I'm still hiding
<Casey> and kill well, I should add.
<Wwombat> Why do you think I came down under ?
<Sea Witch> Anyone seen that pesky marsupial?
<Casey> Nope!
<Casey> He was supposed to be here, but, darn,
I just don't know what happened to him.
<Sea Witch> LOL Casey
<Casey> (Protection fee, Richard, to be mailed
to . . .)
<Wwombat> Well worth every hargatal
<Sea Witch> ROFL
<Casey> Richard mentioned earlier
"stereotyping" as one way of making minor
characters work without drawing attention to
themselves.
<Casey> They become instantly "typed"
without a lot of work and words.
<crip> but is there such a thing as true
stereotyping anymore with so much being written?
<Sea Witch> As opposed to stereo-CDing
<Wwombat> Yea. If you want a Cheer Leader,
everyone knows what they look like
<Wwombat> And do
<Casey> With the team, after hours . . .
<Casey> Yes, Crip.
<Goshwin> fur sure fur sure
<Wwombat> But then they would be the
protagonist
<Sea Witch> Problem with stereotypes is they
can be so cliché
<Casey> that's when we get into grades of minor
characters.
<Casey> Secondary characters are not
protagonists, but not disappearing minor characters,
either.
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<crip> uh oh
<Casey> Boy, when you when off, our chat room
got nuked.
<crip> dang blasted icq!!!
<Goshwin> we are reborn
<Casey> Suddenly everyone was gone and I had to
shut down and come back online.
<Wwombat> Keep your smells -- I mean spells
away from me
<Sea Witch> Hocus pocus diplodocus. You're a
frog Wwombat
<Goshwin> (here have a fly)
<Sea Witch> Twiddling fingers at
marsupial....."You are in my power!"
<Wwombat> Croak Croak
<Sea Witch> Hey it worked!
<Casey> A hairy green frog. How interesting.
<Wwombat> A Hairy Green Frog that BURROWS !!
<Casey> Lots of frogs burrow.
<Sea Witch> And eats lollipops
<crip> and smokes cigars
<Sea Witch> And anything else it can get its
icky tongue wrapped around
<Wwombat> Lots of frogs eat lollipops. Now, for
my next metamorphosis -- Who is going to kiss me ?
<Casey> We were discussing levels of minor
characters before we blew up.
<kissfan> good change of subject HEHEE
<Sea Witch> Sorry Wwombat. My toad kissing days
are long behind me.
<Sea Witch> Evil cackle
<Casey> Puts on wax lips. Kisses Richard.
<Casey> Throws wax lips in trash can, wipes
hand that touched them.
<Casey> Waiting for metamorphosis.
<Sea Witch> LOL
<Casey> Oh no!
<Sea Witch> This one's change into an
outrageous panto dame
<crip> thank goodness those were wax, we don't
wish harm on poor wwombat
<Sea Witch> Oh bugger
<Sea Witch> Wwombat has gone burrowing
<kissfan> guess you shouldn't have kissed him
(even with wax lips) HEHEE
<Sea Witch> heh heh
<kissfan> Richard drop out some can't see you
<Casey> Tell him I am impressed with his
metamorphosis. Now, get back here!
<crip> AS IF!
<Sea Witch> <g>
<Sea Witch> Perhaps he got squished by a boomer
<Goshwin> Boomer?
<Sea Witch> 'roo
<Sea Witch> There's some big buggers hoping
around the outback
<Wwombat> Hi again
<Wwombat> It all went funny when I said I
wanted to be kissed !!!!
<Wwombat> Is there a SEX monitor on this
session ?
<Casey> No, Richard.
<Sea Witch> Your PC probably went into meltdown
Wwombat. It was expecting a handsome prince and got a
panto dame
<Wwombat> Them's the breaks
<Casey> Hey, I was impressed with his
metamorphism from hairy frog to nonexistent being.
<kissfan> LOL
<Wwombat> Zach, will you kiss me. Witchie will
explain why
<Sea Witch> Yeah....maybe too much eye of newt.
What do you think?
<Zach> Er, wow, on the first date?
<Casey> *Digs wax lips out of trash can, passes
them to Zach*
<Sea Witch> Used wax lips? Ewwwww
<Zach> Thanks, Casey.
<Wwombat> Tastes just like lollipop
<Casey> He probably has a sink! He can wash 'em
off.
<Casey> Once upon a time there was a topic.
Secondary characters vs. minor characters.
<Wwombat> Umphh AAaargg Hey, I'm a marsuple
again. Just a minor character
<Wwombat> Secondary characters impact the plot,
minor chars are background
<Sea Witch> There's nothing minor about that
waistline Wwombat. Way too many lollipops
<Casey> Yes, Richard.
<Wwombat> I know, I keep on having to widen the
burrow.
<Casey> Secondary characters can be used as
foils to protags, too. they don't necessarily have to
be involved in their own subplots.
<Wwombat> Minor characters could help with
that, secondary characters would cause a cave in
<Sea Witch> Unless your Davis Eddings of course
<Sea Witch> That man could subplot a hole in a
wall
<Casey> LOL! True, Witchie. There isn't such a
thing as a minor character there. Well, except for
all the peons he kills off.
<Sea Witch> He ought to try trimming a few
major characters too
<Casey> In the beginning of a story, all
characters are equal, only because a reader doesn't
know anything about them.
<Casey> Secondary characters are likely to play
more than one passing part.
<Sea Witch> Or one significant part
<Zach> Casey, a comment on your observation
above (in the beginning, all characters are equal):
don't you think it's the writer's duty to make a
quick distinction between them?
<Casey> Absolutely, Zach.
<Zach> K, just wondering.
<Casey> And we've already addressed a dozen
ways of increasing a character's importance quickly.
<Casey> Or even gradually.
<Zach> Yeah, I missed all that, so don't want
to jump in and say dumb things.
<Sea Witch> Why not? Everyone else has.
<g>
<Zach> heh heh
<Casey> There are no dumb comments here.
<Sea Witch> Just lame ones
<Zach> Perhaps I should ease in and say dumb
things
<Casey> Only remarks that spew drinks from
noses.
<Sea Witch> heh heh
<Casey> Do, Zach. Anytime.
<kissfan> HEHEE *wipes coffee from screen*
<Zach> One thing that everyone should keep in
mind is that a main character will, by definition,
figure in most of the scenes of a book.
<Zach> It's especially true of the motion
picture, which is another form of storytelling of
course.
<Sea Witch> Oh bugger! Does that mean I have to
revise again?
<Casey> No, Witchie!
<Sea Witch> Phew!
<Zach> Maybe. If your main guy/gal is offstage
too much, bring 'em out more.
<Casey> In Lord of the Rings, Saurman
(Butchered spelling) is significant throughout the
book but puts in an appearance twice?
<crip> saruman
<Sea Witch> Yeah, grouchy old git doesn't
deserve another scene
<crip> but he was a driving force readers were
forced to wonder about
<Zach> It's a neat trick to be able to have a
major character offstage and still have them be a
major. Takes supreme writing skill.
<Casey> Hey, I had all the correct letters,
just rearranged. Thanks, Crip.
<Zach> But you'll always find them referred
to--often and with great import.
<Sea Witch> LOTR is one book that could go a
judicial edit
<crip> I think I spelled it wrong too casey
<crip> just wait till the movie comes out this
summer SW
<Sea Witch> No you didn't crip
<Sea Witch> I don't fancy some of the
characters they've chosen.
<Wwombat> Just because I'm a poor marsuple
again
<Sea Witch> Yeah. Hairy green frogs are much
more interesting
<Casey> At least we got through how to develop
a strong focal-point character. Pretty much, if you
reverse all those points, you get fleeting characters
you can use and let vanish without much reader
regret.
<Wwombat> So are panto dames
<Sea Witch> This is true
<Wwombat> Casey, I came in the middle of that
<Casey> Three ways of creating instant
characterizations for minor characters are:
<Casey> eccentricity, exaggeration of a trait,
and obsession.
<Casey> (obsessive personality)
<Sea Witch> I find that some of my characters
undergo drastic changes. Cettay began life as a right
creep for instance
<Sea Witch> He was such a bastard even I was
shocked
<crip> how do you define main and minor if they
both act like that? time in the story?
<Casey> In addition to straight-forward
stereotyping, that is.
<Zach> To expand on what Casey's saying, I
think it's important to give your minor character
some unusual trait to make them memorable in few
words. From there, you just don't develop them like
the more important characters.
<Sea Witch> Or physical feature. Broken nose
for instance
<Casey> How much time spent in action is a
great defining measure.
<Zach> They can't be cardboard cutouts, but
they shouldn't become show-stealers--if they do, then
they are demanding more time and you should give it
to them.
<Casey> If a single character is reappearing
with frequency, it's likely they're a secondary
character.
<Casey> Yes, SW. that can fall under
exaggeration.
<Zach> What's a good cutoff point?
<Sea Witch> The neck
<Casey> LOL!
<Zach> Headless wonder.
<Wwombat> That all makes good sense
<Sea Witch> grin
<Wwombat> How can she grin without a head ?
<Casey> Each character should have a role to
fulfill. When their work is done, they should be left
to retirement.
<Zach> Look down by your feet, wwombat.
<Sea Witch> My face isn't the only thing that
has cheeks
<Goshwin> (and she plows on through all this)
<Zach> Good point, Casey.
<Zach> When they're done, they're done.
<Casey> Another point: anytime a character is
used as the POV character (as in multiple viewpoints)
their significance in the story immediately
increases.
<Zach> And you should be prepared to treat them
on at least secondary status, right?
<Casey> There are also some variables out of
any writer's control.
<Wwombat> So don't use a peon as a POV just
before he gets his head cut off ?
<Casey> right, Zach.
<Sea Witch> LOL Wwombat
<Casey> do that, Richard, only if there's no
other way to get in a particular bit of info that is
that important.
<Goshwin> A pov from the floor?
<Zach> If he describes his own head falling
from that point of view, then why not?
<Casey> It effectively ends that character's
role in the story by whacking off his head, so you
don't fear him taking over.
<Wwombat> Tell that to Witchie
<crip> unless he's the headless horseman
<kissfan> ok then a stalker would be a
secondary character if he is after the lead character
right
<Sea Witch> What was that? Looks up from
sharpening axe
<Casey> Uncontrollable variables: A reader
connecting a character to someone they know and
hating or loving him as a result.
<kissfan> or would he be another main character
<Goshwin> Well in futurerama ther are lot oh
talking heads
<Wwombat> No cruelty to animals allowed here
<Casey> right, Kathy
<kissfan> ok cool I was right then.
<crip> yeah, gosh, we need Nixon head
<Goshwin> he hehe (yah crip got the reff)
<Sea Witch> Why do you want Nixon's toilet
Crip?
<Casey> Too many characters just like your
protag in other novels.
<Wwombat> Casey, your point on uncontrollable
variables. How can you possibly avoid them ?
<Casey> You can't, Richard. That's why they're
uncontrollable.
<Wwombat> If you make the character less vivid,
they are less likely to want to connect it up ?
<Casey> Controlled variables:
<Casey> ordinariness vs. strangeness.
<Casey> Amount of time devoted to any one
character.
<Casey> The character's potential for making
meaningful choices
<Casey> Other characters' focus on that
character.
<Casey> character's frequency of appearance
<Casey> character's degree of involvement in
the action
<Casey> Reader's sympathy for the character
<Casey> narration from the character's POV
<Casey> And with that, my knowledge or
understanding expires.
<Wwombat> Wow Impressive. A great summary
<Casey> Any questions or additions or debates?
<Casey> Thanks, Richard.
<Goshwin> Nope
<Wwombat> Add to frequency, length of story
time
<Casey> Good one, Richard.
<Casey> The length of any story impacts
elements within that story.
<Casey> How much leeway you have to address
issues, develop characterizations, etc.
<Wwombat> Also degree of 'unusualness' or
remember-ability of the character
<Casey> that goes along with ordinariness vs.
strangeness.
<Wwombat> An author takes trouble to make an
important character memorable
<Casey> Especially in character-driven stories,
the characterization has to be in-depth.
<Wwombat> Yes, I agree. Sometimes, don't even
bother to give a character a name
<Casey> Exactly. That's another clue that a
character is very minor, when they don't even have a
name.
<kissfan> like the person behind a sewing
machine in a factory
<Goshwin> facless peons
<Wwombat> Sitting on a bomb
<kissfan> or hear the machine and by that you
know that the person is there
<Wwombat> Even if the sewing machine in
embriodering with a spelling mistake
<Casey> If you consider the things or people
that catch your eye in real-life, and those that
don't, that gives you some direction in how to handle
fictional situations.
<Wwombat> Interesting. Have you noticed how
many real life things we ignore; BUT any we examine
in detail become fascinating. They are ALL worth our
attention
<kissfan> I was writing something last week
that sounded so believable that my husband thought
that it had taken place HEHEE
<Casey> Yep. Sometimes it's interesting to
deliberately pay attention to those people in a mall
who don't catch your attention when you glance
around, and figure out by they don't. What makes them
too ordinary to notice in a crowd?
<Wwombat> Your hubby doesn't know you very well
?
<kissfan> LOL I know that is because he doesn't
want to (I think)
<Casey> Good, Kathy (about the realism)
<Wwombat> But well done anyway. If you can con
him with your writing, think of all the other things
you can get away with .....
<kissfan> HEHEE I know
<Casey> I took a picture of Harold and Tess in
bed this morning. He had his arm around her.
<crip> yuck
<Casey> she had her head on his side. they were
so cute.
<Wwombat> Sounds like a blackmail pic to me
<crip> not that Casey would use blackmail!!!!!
<Casey> Tess is my labrador retreiver.
<Casey> *blink blink blink* Not me!
<crip> LIAR!
<Casey> Smiles sweetly. Bats eyes. Looks very
innocent.
<Wwombat> Does that take a lot of make up ?
<Casey> Richard!!!
<crip> oodles
<kissfan> LOL
<Casey> Crip, you ever want to see Aya's blood?
<Wwombat> So Tess is a secondary character
<Casey> Or another chapter?
<crip> don't you blackmail me, I can stop
writing altogether if you like
<Casey> Not around here! Tess runs the
household.
<kissfan> LOL sounds like my cat
<crip> she's the runaway character
<Wwombat> Or my daughter
<Casey> Let me in. Let me out. Make my supper.
Pay attention to me. Scratch my belly.
<crip> tell harold to stop whining sheesh
<Casey> LOL!
<crip> oh you meant Tess nevermind
<Wwombat> Does Harold like his belly scratched
too ?
<Casey> Absolutely.
<Russ> So, what is the difference between a
secondary character and an extra? (See, I do read
your emails)
<Casey> The amount of time they spend doing
something--anything.
<Russ> When does an extra move into the
secondary character level?
<Casey> (I'm impressed that you read my
emails.)
<Russ> (I'm impressed I can read)
<Casey> When he won't go away and stay gone.
<Casey> (I wasn't going to mention that. I was
trying to be nice.)
<Russ> I'm counting on y'all to get me going
again. I'm in a slump. I hate (yes hate) my current
chapter
<crip> Russ, listen very carefully, YOU CAN'T
LET HER WIN!!!!!
<Casey> Can we look at it and hate it with you?
And tell you why?
<crip> er uh i mean uh i know you have it in
you
<Russ> Hey, you took the challenge too, Mister.
What about you ? <g>
<Casey> (Now we get the excuse-mister!)
<crip> blinkblinkblinkblinkblinkblinkblinkblink
<Russ> I know why I hate it. I stink at
narrative. when I have a character alone, I struggle
until I can pull in someone for him to interact with.
<Casey> Hey, Russ!!! I've finally figured out
the stupid chapter I'm on and am making some
progress.
<Russ> But if you want to see it, sure. That's
great, Casey!
<Casey> Hey, that's always the tough part.
<Casey> I'd love to see it.
<Russ> Should I post it in chat?
<Casey> You can. That would be fun.
<Russ> Just a sec...
<Casey> It's how many paragraphs long?
<Casey> (2 last time I heard)
<Russ> about seven
<kissfan> maybe you don't know your character
well enough
<Casey> Wow!
<Russ> Could be, Kathy. but it's my protag, so
I hope not
<Casey> When I'm writing pure narrative, I have
to invent a purpose for that narrative. Then I have a
reason for writing it, other than simple transition.
<Casey> Makes it more tolerable to write.
<Russ> Here ya go.
<Russ> It took Jaran a few moments to realize
he no longer existed in a world of visions. He opened
his eyes to
<Russ> strangeness. He didn't recognize where
he was except to understand it to be a bedchamber of
some sort.
<Russ> The shutters on the window above the bed
he lay in were thrown open to the night sky, letting
in a breeze
<Russ> tinged with the scent of open sewers,
horses, and a body of water. Jaran lifted his head to
look around the
<Russ> room and collapsed under a wave of
dizziness. He obviously wouldn't be getting up any
time soon. He
<Russ> puzzled over where he was. The last he
remembered, he and Rehlena were in the forest. Now
here he lay in
<Russ> a strange room without a soul about.
What had happened? He heard Rehlena screaming, he
remembered
<Russ> that. He remembered
fighting...something. Some beast. And he'd been hurt.
Hurt bad. He remembered
<Russ> the pain.
<Russ> struggled with his memory. Nothing else
came to him. Where was he? Out the open
<Russ> window, one of the moons came out from
behind a cloud, casting the room in pale light.
Without raising his
<Russ> head, he scanned as much of the room as
possible in the dim light. Across from him, at the
foot of the bed,
<Russ> stood a pine wardrobe against a white
plastered wall. A door of some dark wood was to the
right of the
<Russ> wardrobe. He tried turning his head to
take in more of the room and achieved nothing more
than a headache
<Russ> so intense he saw spots dance in his
vision. He lay there for what seemed like hours with
his eyes closed,
<Russ> breathing shallowly, until his head
stopped throbbing. Gradually the pain became no more
than a dull ache
<Russ> and he opened his eyes.
<Russ> om remained the same as he remembered
it, or rather, didn't remember it. He thought back
<Russ> again, searching his memory for some
clue as to where he was. A blackness like a
stormcloud pervaded his
<Russ> memory, fogging everything from where he
had began to fight the beast until he awoke here the
first time.
<Russ> He furrowed his brow, straining against
the fog, attempting to grasp a hold of something,
anything. But like
<Russ> the cloud it resembled, he found it
insubstantial to his efforts. Except he couldn't
remember a thing from the
<Russ> period. All his striving achieved was a
return of his headache and a weariness that seeped
out of his bones.
<Russ> Exhausted, he slipped back into
unconsciousness.
<Russ> woke next to sunlight streaming through
the still open window. His headache had spread to
<Russ> his entire body. His joints ached and
his limbs felt leaden. One thing besides the pain
overwhelmed him.
<Russ> Hunger. He had no idea when he had last
eaten, but his stomache grumbled and growled. He
needed food.
<Russ> tossed back the quilt. Where were his
clothes? He hoped they were in the wardrobe, not that
<Russ> he could get them the way he felt. His
stomache gave another protesting rumble. He had to
try something.
<Russ> He gritted his teeth and started his leg
toward the edge of the mattress. The effort just to
get one foot on
<Russ> the floor drained him. How could he ever
get out of bed? Let
<Russ> Sorry, only five pp
<Casey> One thing I notice immediately, it's
written by the author, not by Jaran.
<Casey> Omniscient voice.
<kissfan> Yes me too
<kissfan> see through the character's eyes not
yours
<Russ> Good point.
<Casey> Omniscient voice has always been
difficult for me to write. It's more fun to be your
character and take in information, process it, and
suffer.
<Russ> Can you point out where you see omni?
<Russ> BRB...type slowly
<Goshwin> O
<Goshwin> K
<Goshwin> I
<Goshwin> S
<Goshwin>
<Goshwin> T
<Goshwin> H
<Goshwin> I
<Goshwin> S
<Goshwin>
<Goshwin> S
<Goshwin> L
<Goshwin> O
<Goshwin> W
<Goshwin>
<Goshwin> E
<Goshwin> N
<Casey> Gosh, go stand in the trash can!
<Russ> Yes!
<Goshwin> U
<Goshwin> he he he he
<kissfan> LOL
<Casey> Out the open
<Casey> <Russ> window, one of the moons
came out from behind a cloud, casting the room in
pale light.
<Russ> Hokay. How to rewrite in 3rd limited?
<Russ> Nope, Crip. but he lost you too
<Casey> that didn't pick up the whole sentence.
It's not a blatant omniscence like we're accustomed
to thinking about, but the words you're using seem to
come between Jaran and the reader.
<Goshwin> He watched the moon ?
<Casey> His head is lying on the pillow.
<Casey> I lost him, too.
<Casey> For good!
<Casey> Just lost Kathy, too.
<Russ> I still have Kathy
<Casey> (Haven't we done this once tonight?)
<Goshwin> Uhoh ICQ is at it again
<Casey> Let me save the buffer just in case.
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<Russ> Any other comments on the bit of
putridness I infected y'all with?
<Casey> Remember how connected Jaran was to the
visions in his last chapter, Russ?
<Russ> Yeah. I'm not sure what I'm doing
different. If I knew, I wouldn't be doing it
<Casey> He was the visions and they were him.
<Casey> Okay, his head is lying on the pillow.
What he would see is probably not the moon coming out
from behind the clouds (unless the window is on the
wall at his feet and he can stare through it)
<Casey> what he's more likely to be aware of is
a sudden pale light through the window that
illuminates the room in grayed shadows.
<kissfan> unless he was seeing it in a mirror
<Russ> I'll go reread ch 7. next to him.
window. English is first language. ugh.
<Casey> My sense from Rehlena's chapter is
that's not where the window was.
<Russ> Hmmmm, will check on that
<Casey> You have: The shutters on the window
above the bed where he lay. Is that at his head?
<Casey> that's more where I thought they were
in Chpt. 7-- and slightly to one side.
<Russ> to his side. Better make that clearer
<Casey> He had no idea when he had last eaten,
but his stomach grumbled and growled. He needed food.
<Casey> Now I can't read that.
<Russ> Yup. That stinks.
<Russ> Any comments, gosh?
<Casey> But most of your sentences begin with
"He." That tendency alone separates jaran
from his thoughts.
<kissfan> I thought I noticed that Russ was
doing what I have a tendency of doing
<Casey> When was the last time he'd eaten?
makes the thought Jaran's alone, without author
intrusion.
<Casey> We all have a tendency to do that in a
draft! Not just Russ. Trust me.
<kissfan> LOL I do it all the time. I am trying
to stop doing it but it is hard not to
<Casey> It is very hard not to. I catch myself
doing it too when I'm getting sloppy or tired.
<Russ> I think I may need to scrap the entire
pile and start over. I can't even bring myself to
write any more on it right now.
<Goshwin> Scrap how much?
<Russ> I had the entire night last night to
myself and didn't even try to write. Just this
chapter, Gosh
<Goshwin> Change the voice (I would agree) ...
<Casey> I had to scrap a lot of my current
chapter. (Most of it.) Then I made a list of what
needed to be included. Then I started getting in
character thoughts and concerns (another list). That
finally got me through my slump.
<Russ> I may actually try to write the
beginning of this chapter longhand <GASP>
<Goshwin> he he he... I'm having a crit slump (till I saw Casey's stuff) *(I love a small crit)
<Russ> Sometimes that helps me get going again.
<Casey> Taking a break from writing helps me,
too. I occasionally need the stimulation of
real-life.
<Russ> I have enough stimulation. Writing is
the break for me
<Casey> SW's chapter put my paltry effort to
shame! She writes soooo well.
<Russ> It was very good. Too many characters,
but other than that...
<Casey> then for you, it may be difficult to
switch into hard focus. You do have lots of
stimualtion
<Russ> Focus? What is "Focus"?
<Casey> Ah-ha!
<kissfan> LOL I am having that trouble too.
Can't focus
<Russ> Write a word, play a game of solitaire,
write another word, check email, etc. Is that focus?
<Casey> It usually takes me 15 minutes to
achieve the necessary focus to begin writing
(uninterrupted minutes)
<Casey> No, that's not, Russ.
<Russ> Drat, Casey.
<Casey> Games on computers are my downfall,
too.
<kissfan> LOL write a word chase 5 year old out
of bathroom. write another word change movies for the
kid write another. . .
<Goshwin> *squeel of feedback* Testing one to
three (Tap tap tap *Squeeel*
<Casey> We all have a lot of distractions in
life.
<Casey> Another trick that used to work for me,
is to write at the same time every day. (I can't
achieve that luxury anymore.)
<Russ> Same time? only if I forgo sleep
altogether. I need my four hours, though
<Casey> That's not the story I usually get!
<Russ> Guess I'll just have to quit my job.
<Goshwin> I wish I didn't need sleep....
<Casey> You mean that invincible Russ actually
has weaknesses of the flesh?
<Russ> Only four. That's all I need.
<kissfan> Ya me too if I didn't need sleep I
would have time for everything
<Casey> whoa! My whole world is crashing about
me.
<Goshwin> then I would really be able to do
things... But if we all could do that, then life
would expand and we still would have no time
<Casey> No, Kathy. You'd still have too much to
do.
<Russ> Just imagine. fifteen hour workdays
becoming the norm
<kissfan> What I hate is when I go to bed and
start to relax, the ideas come
<Goshwin> Oh god yah
<Goshwin> the horror, the horror
<Casey> Have you learned how to write in the
dark?
<Goshwin> with a flash light
<Russ> I just leave the light on all night
<kissfan> LOL yep
<Casey> Good.
<Goshwin> sort of like playing pup tent when I
was a kid,, I throw a sheet over the mon and away I
go
<kissfan> I put my head under the blankets and
use a flashlight HEHEE
<Russ> I can hardly read my writing when I
write in the light at a desk, let alone in the dark
laying on my back
<Casey> The only thing that gets me is when
Harold's taken the pen or pencil I keep by the pad of
paper on the nightstand. Or it's fallen on the floor
or into a shoe.
<kissfan> LOL ya that is why I keep several
there that way at least I can find one
<kissfan> One of these days I will have a
notebook pc that I can keep ready at all times HEHEE
<kissfan> that way I won't need a pen
<Casey> usually a few words or a phrase is
enough to spark my recall in the morning. I usually
don't have to write out paragraphs as I'm falling
asleep.
<kissfan> ya just enough so the thought is
there when you need it
<Casey> I still don't trust electronic
recordings! I've lost too much stuff that I was
composing on a computer. Once when Harold blew a
fuse.
<kissfan> I lost 13 pages like that when the
power went off (I forgot to save my work)
<Russ> I write much better on the computer. I
type much better than I write longhand. And much
faster. It takes me forever to write something out
longhand
<Casey> I remember that, Kathy. How sickening.
<kissfan> ya that is why I need that notebook
pc that way I can have it at my sister's place
<Russ> <Goshwin> Casey is a weener nyaaa
nyaaaa
<Russ> Just thought I'd pass that on <g>
<Casey> LOL! Oooooo, maybe he looks better in
cyberspace.
<kissfan> took longer for me to rewrite it than
it had taken me the first time
<Russ> He's dropped out again
<Casey> Let's leave him there. <g>
<Russ> Meanie :P
<Goshwin> (puts on hat sunglasses and smoking a
pipe "I have returned!" (promply trips and
does a face plant)
<Russ> You and Patton ought to get together,
Gosh
<kissfan> better take off the sunglasses before
you break your neck
<Goshwin> DOHHH
<Russ> Anyone else having some difficulty on
something we could help with?
<Russ> I think I know what I need to do with
mine
<Casey> Put down the flame thrower, Russ.
<kissfan> ya nice and slowly russ
<Goshwin> (puts on a hat and sunglasses...)
<Russ> Too late. Already toasted my chapter.
Thought I could leave it out for a while. (hehe)
<Goshwin> LOOK OUT HES GOT THE BOMB! (he must
really hate that chapter)
<Russ> I do, I do.
<Casey> He's already admitted he hates the
chapter.
<Casey> Now we can all hate the same chapter
together. What camaraderie.
<Russ> Awww. Glad I could bring us all so
close.
<Goshwin> A blue flash and a moment is frozen
by the brilliant strob of detonation... the chapter
is gone, a moment later, the rest of the chat follows
<Goshwin> GRIN
<Russ> Not to mention eastern Colorado
<Goshwin> All in the name of
"Editing"
<kissfan> LOL isn't it always that way
<Casey> Is it weird that we spend so much time
lamenting the fact we don't have time to write when
instead of complaining, we could be writing?
<Russ> Too true, Casey
<Casey> But then, we could envision this as
writing. Practice.
<kissfan> yep we could.
<Casey> I could make all of you complain
originally and with perfect grammar.
<Russ> I think of any time I'm thinking about
my wip ass writing time
<Casey> your wip ass?
<kissfan> LOL
<Russ> Don't tell heather I told you about that
<Casey> I promise. I couldn't tell her with a
straight face.
<Russ> thanksssss
<Goshwin> wip ass, gooooollly wilber let us do
sum wip ass written.. (whars me pig!)
<Russ> See what happens when I try to be
serious, Casey?
<Goshwin> Seeeeweeeee
<kissfan> I have found an interesting way to
get to know my main characters
<Casey> Russ, stay away from serious.
<Russ> Biblically, Kathy?
<Casey> How? Tell us!
<kissfan> LOL nope I let them write about me.
that way I think like them
<Russ> That's an interesting idea, Kathy. I
might just have to try it
<kissfan> One of them I have keeping a journal
of her daily thoughts
<Casey> Cool! Kathy is now her characters'
character.
<kissfan> LOL yep
<Casey> I wonder if they'll decapitate her?
<Russ> Brings up some interesting philosphical
questions, don't it?
<kissfan> One gave me Prozac to stop the editor
within for a while HEHEE
<Casey> Yeah. All those mean things you've ever
done to your characters? well, it's time for revenge.
<kissfan> LOL yep
<Russ> BRB...need nicotine.
<kissfan> I like the journal idea it is working
really well
<Casey> They work surprisingly well. I kept a
journal for several years. I was frequently surprised
by what came out.
<kissfan> it is a complete diary of my
character's thoughts and what the character sees
<Casey> Tell me why you hate Aya, Crip. (Except
for that one brief slip-up.)
<crip> he's just a hatable character
<crip> all knowing dorky big brother
<Russ> LOL, crip
<Casey> What makes him hateable? Because he's
an authority figure?
<crip> not that Manerra is much better
<crip> ooops did i say that?
<Russ> (not that I hate him, Casey <g>)
<Casey> You can hate him, Russ.
<Russ> I don't hate anyone. except for the jerk
who had his locker next to mine in high school
<Casey> Am I making the point that there are
likeable and detestable traits (or at lease ignoble
traits) in everyone?
<kissfan> there has to be to make them
realistic
<Russ> That's what makes them believable.
<crip> yeah if all characters were perfect like
me it would make for boring reading
<Casey> I want to see if at some point Crip
changes his opinion about Aya.
<Russ> That's why I don't write
autobiographically, Crip.
<Casey> Exactly, Crip. (sortta)
<shorty103> well, it's like one of the
characters within my story, he's very controlling and
just a regular son of gun, always wants control over
everything
<Casey> Oh, gawd, the guys have joined forces!
<kissfan> LOL sounds like a fun one to do
<Casey> Aren't bad guys easier to write than
good guys?
<kissfan> that's ok they can't be better than
us women
<Russ> We must unite against the evil Casey!
<kissfan> always.
<crip> agreed, Russ. to the pitchforks and
torches!!!!
<kissfan> better check guys you are outnumbered
<crip> yes but we're much taller
<kissfan> HEHEHE
<Russ> And we can run very fast.
<crip> yes indeed
<kissfan> really? how tall do you think I am?
<Casey> Good guys are like magical beings, they
have to operate under a set of limitations.
<Russ> 4' 9"?
<kissfan> LOL wrong
<shorty103> Kathy, I think you're about
5'5"
<Casey> Russ's ego is showing.
<crip> 3'5"?
<kissfan> nope. I am almost 6 feet tall
<crip> Casey is about 2'7 I know this for fact
<Russ> I thought I had it carefully under my
hat.
<kissfan> 5'9 to be exact
<Casey> Have you been talking to Harold again?!
I mean, NO! That's not true!
<Russ> Still got you by seven inches
<shorty103> wow! than I'll be looking up at you
Kathy, I'm 5'0"
<crip> all I heard was something resembling one
of the lollipop kids was chasing down a dog down the
street
<kissfan> LOL
<shorty103> very funny Kathy!
<Russ> Did the dog have a chisel and a piece of
granite tied to its back?
<crip> I think so
<Casey> LOL!
<Casey> You mean she hasn't gotten there yet,
Russ?
<Russ> Not yet. No wonder I can't write this
@#$#@ chapter
<shorty103> Kathy, I didn't realize you were
that tall, I'm a short compared to you! Mut and Jeff!
If you know what I mean
<kissfan> LOL yep
<Casey> Rose, you're short compared to most
people.
<Russ> You even make my wife look tall. (she'll
be so happy)
<Casey> How tall is Heather?
<shorty103> yes, so if Kathy, if you come in
the door downstairs, you will have to duck, 'cause
you will knock you head off
<Russ> Can you think of a good way to describe
a headache without saying headache?
<Casey> His head pounded.
<crip> casey wouldn't stop talking.
<Russ> More intense, Casey
<crip> oh you mean adjective like
<Russ> lol, Crip
<kissfan> LOL
<Casey> When I've got a really awful headache,
it affects my stomach. makes me nauseous.
<Casey> I can't have anyone touch the bed. I
can't take the movement.
<crip> migraines?
<Casey> No. Sinus attack.
<Russ> Good. You must have a headache a lot for
all the stuff you puke, er, type here
<crip> yuck, just as bad
<kissfan> yep a migrain I get them all the
time. try feaverfew it really works
<Casey> Ha! No more helping Russ.
<Casey> Describe your headaches then, Kathy.
<kissfan> nausea, can't take light, can't take
movement.
<Casey> There's too much congestion associated
with my headache to be migraines.
<Casey> smells are terrible, too.
<kissfan> yep
<Casey> Sparks the urge to vomit.
<kissfan> forget eating food smells awful
<Russ> Never had a migraine, thank goodness
<crip> not the vomit discussion again, please
god no!
<kissfan> be glad Russ they are terrible
<kissfan> forget standing up your head pounds
even more
<shorty103> had to put a cold cloth over the
eyes, which helped, but not much
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